Comments on: Direct Mail: What REALLY Goes Through The Female Customer’s Mind

By: Direct Mail Services

Direct Mail Services — Fri, 22 Jul 2011 20:14:58 +0000

That postcard has way to many exclamation points. Whenever I see exclamation points like that I immediately get the feeling like they are trying really hard to sell me on something I don’t really need.

By: Michele Miller

Michele Miller — Tue, 30 Mar 2010 16:15:12 +0000

Good for you, Randy! Be sure to share your success stories with us. And thanks for commenting.

By: Randy

Randy — Tue, 30 Mar 2010 15:16:37 +0000

Wow, I have learned over the course of the year that my marketing is geared mostly to the woman of the house. I have a copywriter that I get my stuff from, since I am just getting started I will make sure to follow the suggestions made.

By: Laura

Laura — Mon, 19 Oct 2009 21:40:46 +0000

Nice approach!

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Weekend Links : Jeff Sexton Writes — Sat, 17 Oct 2009 03:44:27 +0000

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By: jeannine McChesney

jeannine McChesney — Thu, 15 Oct 2009 23:47:52 +0000

ou at least read the piece. I would have tossed it immediately. Bad design, bad promises and bad copy! That equals crappy contractor.

Thanks for posting!

By: Gerry Myers

Gerry Myers — Tue, 13 Oct 2009 21:00:12 +0000

Michele
Is it a copywriting or a gender issue? Good question. I would say both. The grammatical errors and poorly worded copy are definitely copywriting, but the tone and choice of works reeks of machoism. As we all know, women are usually the major decision maker in home remodeling.

Even if it was well written, which it isn’t, it is way too long. It needs to have some easy to read, perhaps bullet points, that tell you what he does, why he is qualified, what he is offering, as well as how to get more information about his business if you are interested.

I don’t want to duplicate others’ comments on the massive mess this “sales tool” is.

Let us know if he hires you.
Gerry

By: Michele Miller

Michele Miller — Tue, 13 Oct 2009 05:02:39 +0000

Wow, guys – all fantastic comments! If I hadn’t just spent 12 hours in client meetings, I’d address all of your excellent points individually. You found new stuff, added some personal insight, and definitely made me laugh. I’ve had a couple of people also email me, wondering if this is so much of a “gender” issue vs. copywriting issue. The only real part of “gender” here, for me, is that with four times the number of connections into the right brain, the female brain is going to process this BS faster and kick it to the curb with utmost speed. Male brains are definitely going through this process, too — maybe not quite as deeply (from a linear sense) or as quickly.

Thanks again – keep the comments coming!

By: Kat Gordon

Kat Gordon — Mon, 12 Oct 2009 22:43:44 +0000

As a copywriter, this postcard was like Christmas for me. Such machismo. The cojones to ask for — no demand — a $4,000 sale in a 4×6 space. The blatant disregard for apostrophes. The false intimacy of “to our neighbors at” greeting. The bragging about $50 million budget projects in the past, despite falling from grace 12,500% to $4,000 projects today. My advice: forward this to Scottsdale’s best morning deejay for an on-air call posing as an interested customer.

By: Mary Schmidt

Mary Schmidt — Mon, 12 Oct 2009 16:00:44 +0000

Indeed.

I’d actually like to receive a postcard now and then from a truly reputable local contractor…or landscaper…or auto mechanic. I don’t have time to find them. Unfortunately, most of what I DO get looks a lot this (or even worse.)

And, the contractor will complain that “direct mail doesn’t work.”